注同学们的用词和句型的使用。
高分作文标志
1 ：四级120-150 字；六级150-180 字；
2 是否长短句交叉；
3 用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；
4 关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；
下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：
1.适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实，句子开头不要总是用we
/ I （比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be
paid to.）举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的后一段：It is ，therefore ，
high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service
industry like that. Thus， its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放
在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入语放在中间，一般
放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。
比如说： Other individuals， however， take the attitude that …
3.一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。（考试中一般不要出现
good， bad， many ， thing， think， people ， opinion等等）比如上面例
子中，applicable代替proper， approaches 代替ways， implement代替carry
out ， sharpen one''s competitive edge代替enhance one''s competitiveness
（提高某物竞争力）
下面举一篇我南京六级班上一位同学写的优秀作文（14分）的例子，看看他
是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换
和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。
Computer and I By Simmy
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought
me a computer as birthday present ， which exerted a tremendous fascination
on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information
i had expected，and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night
I was sleepless ， feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替换 very
thrilling 替换 exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换 sb. be interested in
sth.
google替换 search
an army of替换 a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of
computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology，
computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing
to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged
by them ， in large measure ！
The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某
个时期发生了什么事情；
Increasing popularity 替换 more and more popular
Coincident with …非常地道的词汇，表达＂与…一致＂的意思，替换 With
…
Advancement 替换 development
Pour into （ flood into / swarm into）替换 enter into
Current （ currently）替换 now
Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals 替换 more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的For a start
，we can ， freely ， search desired information at any moment . Little
by little ， our knowledge will be well enriched， and our horizons will
be greatly broadened. Additionally， we can get huge recreations online
by chatting ， playing games， or delivering email.
For a start 替换 To begin with
We can， freely ， search 用了插入语的写作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched ， and our horizons will be greatly
broadened.用了非常精彩的被动
