还有，这篇文章的风格过于随意（informal）。演讲辞属于正式文体，其用词应该比较讲究。如文章第一句稍加修改就变成： I feel honored to stand here as an candidate for the president of the students’ union。演讲辞虽然不能像一般文章一样用一些很长、很复杂的句子，但也不能全用很短、很简单的句子。那样会显得很单调，同时会使阅卷老师觉得没有很强的造句能力。
比如我们可以八一、二两句结合起来，这样就变成：As a junior in Chemical Department, today I feel honored to stand here as an candidate for the president of the students’ union。原文的第四句则可以改成： For the wonderful job I have done and great contribution I have made, I have been often praised by both my classmates and my teacher。类似的可以修改合并的句子在上述这篇文章中可以说比比皆是。修改过以后的句子读起来就富于变化。而原文的句子13个中只好由9个直接由I 开头，这样的开头方式过于单调。
比如我们可以八一、二两句结合起来，这样就变成：As a junior in Chemical Department, today I feel honored to stand here as an candidate for the president of the students’ union。原文的第四句则可以改成： For the wonderful job I have done and great contribution I have made, I have been often praised by both my classmates and my teacher。类似的可以修改合并的句子在上述这篇文章中可以说比比皆是。修改过以后的句子读起来就富于变化。而原文的句子13个中只好由9个直接由I 开头，这样的开头方式过于单调。
